Do you ever feel that despite the millions of words in the english vocabulary, you just seem to use only about a thousand?? I'll write a sentence and stare at it knowing there has to be a better way to say it, but not know how. That's where our critical readers come in handy. We had a post last week where people feel like we should have an online critique group. I think it's a great idea, but I personally don't have the time to set it up right now. If someone is interested in heading it up, let me know and I'll tell you how to get started. Otherwise, let's use the blog for a small workshop today. I'll start by posting two short sentences that I feel need to be reworded but I don't know how. You add comments telling me how to fix mine and also feel free to leave a sentence in your comment that needs to be fixed. We will number each sentence that needs help, so when someone is commenting to fix something, they can specify what number they are offering suggestions for. This post should have a TON of comments today!! Don't be shy! Let's make our blog work for us.
#1 Sometimes the past six months seemed to almost not exist, she could almost believe that she had just talked to her grandmother, or touched her wrinkled skin. Then other times the six months seemed to have lasted an eternity.